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Monday, July 26, 2010

Gone is just another word....Magpie Tale #24


I sit in the chair facing the last scene of our entanglement. You're gone now, but the scent of you lingers in the linens. I can't bear to sleep there even though my eyes are heavy with the want of slumber....and I can't bear to freshen the bed with line-dried sheets and pillow coverings with not a trace of that wantonness that lingers still in the back of my mind.

My head lolls with the supreme effort of staying awake. Why can't I just let myself fall into sleep? Am I afraid that when I wake, the nothingness will no longer be a hazy unreality....but harsh clarity in the glaring light of the noonday sun?

This is my first attempt at Magpie Tales. Visit here to see all the entries. Photo supplied by Willow at Life at Willow Manor.








36 comments:

VioletSky said...

oh yes, this is where blinds and heavy curtains get in the act and allow one to drown in ones feelings...

good for you for joining in. there is an awful lot of creativity out there
(you will want to check your link, though)

rel said...

a terrific submission 1s or not! :)

Susan said...

Thanks, Sanna, I fixed the link. It was fun writing...and I think it's one of those things where it will just instantly come to you....or not at all.

Susan said...

Thank you, rel!

Ruth said...

Ooo la la, Susie! A torrid Magpie tale, great! So glad you added yours to the community. Way fun. :D

I was just thinking about the word tangle too . . . (synch-ro-ni-ci-ty)

Jingle said...

lovely tale,
gone like wind,
but the smell lingers...

ds said...

Ooooh! Wonderful! Love "entanglement", love not knowing whether to change the linens, love the scent, the light, the whole thing.
So glad you jumped in!!

Tattered and Lost said...

This breaks my heart because it sounds like conversations I've had with my friend whose husband recently died. She awoke to find him dead next to her. She hasn't slept in months and cannot bring herself to change the bedding. Not what you intended, but it's where my mind immediately went.

Judy said...

This is such a cool idea! Thanks for sharing. Maybe I'll try at some point.

Oliag said...

I am in awe of my blogging friends who are joining in this creative story telling...but yours my dear Susan is the Hottest! And I mean that in a good way:)

Deborah said...

You brazen woman, you! Shameless hussy! (Or maybe not. Was this your husband you were referring to??? Still...)

Yyeeeeees. More, please, of this bit-between-her-teeth Susan. I like her.

Deborah said...

I've just read Tattered and Lost's comment, which dampens my spirits a bit. Oh god, I'd be the same. Not changing the sheets.

Susan said...

Ruthie, I almost took it down as soon as I put it up. This really isn't me and I don't know where it came from. But I guess it opened a few eyes a little wider, wouldn't you say? :)

Susan said...

Thank you, jingle. It was very nice of you to drop by.

Susan said...

ds, don't you feel good, knowing you inspired me to play with it? I loved your poem so much, but could never hope to write any as good as that one. So, I had to fall back on prose. Thank you for the inspiration.

Susan said...

Oh, Tattered, that is very heartbreaking. It certainly could be read in that context, which I didn't realize when I wrote it. I'm sorry to have made you sad and very sorry for your friend's loss.

Susan said...

Judy, you should do it! I've followed it sporadically since it started, but didn't really think I could do it justice. ds inspired me after reading her gorgeous poem. You should read it:

http://thirdstoreywindow.blogspot.com/2010/07/my-first-magpie-with-apologies-to-mr.html

Susan said...

Oliag, now I'm the one who is blushing! Yikes! Perhaps I'd better tone down the next one, or they'll be giving me an X rating!

Susan said...

Deb, you're cracking me up! Maybe I should start writing bodice-ripping romance novels...do they still write those? I read a few back in the day. Actually, I thought mine was a little more subtle than that.

Yes, Tattered's comment gave it a whole other perspective. Sad.

Helen said...

I really like the 'nothingness and hazy unreality' line! Nice writing.

Susan said...

Thank you, Helen! And thank you for visiting.

RA said...

So much truth in your words, a great Magpie! :)

willow said...

Bittersweet. Well done!

Char said...

congrats on a brilliant first entry - very bittersweet and thought provoking.

Tumblewords: said...

Pensive and provocative!

Tattered and Lost said...

No problem. Sometimes I read some of the Magpie posts and see something completely different than others. Depends on how we fill the holes. I know I've had reactions a few times to things I've written and thought, "Really, is that there?"

Susan said...

Thank you, RA, and thanks for visiting!

Susan said...

Willow, thank you, it was fun!

Susan said...

Char, you sweetheart, thank you. You should do it, too. You would be great. It doesn't take much time and I would love to see your interpretations.

Susan said...

Thank you, Tumblewords!

Susan said...

Tattered, it's all in the perception and one's state of mind at any given moment, isn't it?

Stafford Ray said...

Make the bed! :-)

Susan said...

Hello, Stafford Ray! If only it were mine to make!

Suz said...

Sometime the bed will have to be made
but for this instant I so felt for her
nice job

kathew said...

Nicely done!

annell said...

That was a good one! It was just right!